The Savior
Today I meet the one that will make me whole.
His copper hair shines in the sun from across the yard where he plays.
He walks to me with innocent eyes not caring that I am broken.
My heart swells for the first time since I lost the one I loved.
He does not care that I still love another.
He dose not care that I can not love him yet.
He wants to put me back together.
He wants to show me it is okay to love once again.
He is the only one that will understand.
He is the piece I have been missing.
He is the only one that can save me from myself.
He will never choose another.
He will be mine till the end of time.
My copper solider; Who's love will bring me out of darkness
And lead me back into the light where I belong.
My heart still beats slowly,
Its wounds still not fully healed,
But the day has finally come.
This poem is truly beautiful. It is definitely a work of art that is full of emotion without being too dramatic. I love the line "My copper soldier whose love will bring me out of darkness," I think this refers to his hair color, which is also described as copper (and should possibly be changed to add some interest so that the same distinct adjective isn't being used twice). However, I feel that there is a little disconnect...first I thought the person described was a child since he was "playing" with “innocent eyes” but then he is described as a soldier and I get a little of a romantic vibe. I don’t know how this person is the only one that will understand—what part does he play in the author’s loss? How will he put the author “back together?” I suppose my ultimate question is...who is the person? It's intriguing to me; I like the elusiveness of the poem. I like that I have this question, it make the poem interesting. However, if maybe a few of the questions were a little more obviously answered, the reader would be better able to relate.
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