Ode to KellenIts strange not seeing you here
The flower vases filled with dead daisies
The movie case shut tight
It feels empty even with my life
Filling this space
Being here will never be the same
All of the fun memories we shared
School, parties, and cooking together
I put away your favorite wine
Hoping, praying that maybe you would come back
But I know in my heart
You can never return
I wonder if the Angels would be angry
If I thought of joining you?
I look for any reminder of you
But find none
You took everything with you to Ireland
Even though six days later
You would never see it again.
I miss you.
I will always cherish you.
In loving memory
I'm definitely glad that Hannah wrote a paragraph of where she was coming from with this poem before the actual piece—such a tragedy at such a young age. Hannah’s prelude allowed for me to become emotionally involved before I even read the poem. My absolute favorite part is, “I wonder if the Angels would be angry if I thought of joining you.” This line needs to go further in m y opinion. It’s so beautiful and if Hannah incorporated more of this type of language in the poem, I think it would take it to another level. I like that she made herself and Kellen older; it makes this more relatable for adults. However, if it wouldn’t be too painful, I’d really like to hear a little more of how she felt when she were younger. It would be a different poem altogether, of course. But I really think it would be interesting if we saw this through young eyes as well as through an adults. Something I would probably change would be the lines “I miss you. I will always cherish you.” Especially the “I miss you”. It is obvious from the previous lines that Hannah misses Kellen so I don’t know if it is necessary to actually say it. Maybe if the two lines weren’t so abstract they would fit the poem better. Just my opinion. Otherwise, beautiful poem Hannah!
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